wake up faith. wake up lidda and lia for school.said dad tell them to go and and brush their teeth and to have a shower. okay then said faith wake up liddia and lia wake up for school okay they went one by one for a shower they got their bags and went to school.
after that they saw a horrible dangerous bridge and it was cutted into pieces and they saw a pipe to get to school and they went in one by one.
finally they got to school they faith liddia
and lia forgot their lunch and when it became to morning tea time faith,liddia and lia
told their friend if they can have some lunch please !!! where is lidia's and lias lunch okay yous can have a sandwich each and a uoget.thank you for the food that you gave to my too sisters it's okay. thank you. THE END
Hope where have your speech marks gone? These ones - "....". You had them in your book! Remember to write your story out correctly, otherwise it looks like you didn't include them at all.
ReplyDeleteI like how you have tried to use lots of dialogue in your story and some different punctuation like !!!!. Keep it up!